Well, I probably should have used quite instead of pretty but it's only a post so that probably doesn't matter. Apart from that, it's fine.
Also, *your.
The content of the preview was decent but the structure of the preview as a whole was poor as well as individual sentences and sections. You can immediately tell it's the work of someone who has no craft but thinks they do.
Without knowing it was Pou's work, I immediately chuckled at another "website writer" who probably thinks he's cool because it was an "article" that got posted somewhere. The match-related stuff that gets put up here is generally quite poor and I just thought it was just another example from one of the regulars (I don't know who they are because I rarely get to the end due to the poor quality of the piece).
Look, I wasn't being a prick, just pointing out one of the things that I immediately notice about anything that is written. Prose is my strong point and structure is something that comes naturally to me so I almost always focus on that just as much as content.
The content is fine. Despite the fact that Pou is a wanker and talks extreme amounts of shit to justify his massive ego, it's not as if he knows nothing about rugby league. His writing skills are simply average, at best.
Well mate, I am actually published (trade journal), and I write fiction as a hobby (unpublished, but with a few unpaid 'credits'). I also get paid to write in my job, so I know a little bit about writing.
I too cringe at plenty of sports writing, even by sports 'journos' in major newspapers. As for this piece, in hindsight a couple of things pop out at me as weak - mostly stylistic bits like 'individual brilliance' to start successive paragraphs, 'impressive' and 'impressed' in the same sentence, and so on. But I was writing to a deadline and didn't do the majority of it until the last minute. You should have seen it before my final edit. Ugly.
Anyway, plenty of laymen think I am a brilliant writer (they're wrong) but you're the first person ever to outright say I have poor writing skills (you're probably wrong too).
As for structure coming 'naturally' to you, this isn't fiction you deadshit. It's a preview, and I was stuck with the format I was given.
Anyway, it's easy to criticise without providing any fixes. You sound like just another jealous loser that wishes he had done more with his life. It's impossible to not sound like a wanker when you're writing about something on which every merkin has an opinion. Just as you'll sound like a wanker when you write next year's preview. androtrop.
