Furry Serious Post # 2
"Trees"
Trees (By Chloe...) depicts the everlasting nature of trees, and notes the fact of how undervalued they truly are.
"Ancient and wise, everlasting you shall stand/Bring Shade to our children, drop fruit to our land" depicts to the responer that trees will still be here long after we have perished. Even though we may not treat them with a degree of respect, they still provide us with the shade and supplies we need at times.
The second stanza, however, does not successfully justify previous points. "Large and small birds alike nest in you" and "The air you supply us comes with no catch, it is free" continues to show the usefulness of trees to not just humans, but animals aswell. But the line between during this stanza, "Untamed and so wild, yet with virtue so true" appears to be seemingly irrelevant and is not substanciated or perhaps not correcly expressed by the composer.
The final stanza ends the poem well, but again tends to be too generalised. "Loggers and bushfires, what cannot be overcome?" is slightly fragmented and may be confusing to a responder, as it is not further commented on. But the composer continues to justify that trees will always be here (and in great force) with "When there's a war to be fought you have been there and won/From the rainforests of Queensland to the woods of Tennessee".
The repetition of "Trees Trees" is an effective technique, but may be under-used. Usually in most poems that use this technique, the word is repeated 3 times for further emphasis.
The tone of the poem is constant (in praising the trees) but again, the line in Stanza 3 "Loggers and bushfires, what cannot be overcome? " subsequently confuses the mood and tone of the poem, and seems to be out of place.
In conclusion, I personally think it is a fairly well written poem but there are noted flaws that should be addressed if the work is to be entered into a contest. It tends to be cluttered, generalised, and somewhat confusing. Chloe stated that there was work to be done on it, and I hope I have pointed out a few of the problems (Too tired to write a big analysis on each word
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). Goodnight
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